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Blessed by Favor's an interesting one. White is certainly a correct colour for planeswalker support, though I'm not sure red is. The art certainly has the appearance of a boros colored card, but the effect, if it had a secondary color, I would think for it to be green, since that's a colour that cares about counters. I would propose changing it to be {1}{g}{w}{w} or {1}{w}{w}{w}.
I like where the idea is going. I had some thought of a card with similar function but I had a second opinion.
The feel of the card should be of the blue, green or white colors.
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/vard-dethroned-king
The card is interesting, but needs quite a bit of re-formatting. In addition, remember to italicize reminder text.
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Commit (Rather than pay colorless mana to cast this spell, you may exile that many cards from the top of your library instead. If you do, skip that many of your next draw steps.)
Vard, Dethroned King enters the battlefield with an amount of +1/+1 counters equal to the amount of cards exiled to cast it.
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Although, I prefer the following version. (Highlighted differences!)
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Commit (Rather than pay colorless mana to cast this spell, you may exile that many cards from the top of your library instead. If you do, skip drawing that many of your next cards.)
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Next: (Edited: 9:47PM, 7/13/2017.)
Any recommendations for future cards of this nature, since I already fixed the wording?
I was mainly concerned with making sure it entered under the same player's control rather than the owner's, to prevent unfair exploits with land exchanges.
"This land is designed around landfall and Tithe-like effects. Of course, at the cost that it can only produce mana on your turn."
So, it can choke your opponent's plains with Cloudstone Curio, free mill with Altar of the Brood, and give another extra landfall benefits to permanents with landfall. And many other things, I guess. Nice.
It would work better with itself and with balance in general if the cost was XBB and it said something similar to "Each opponent exiles X cards from his or her hand. If he or she can't, they lose Y life, where Y is X minus the number of cards they exiled times two.".
My phrasing could use some work I'm sure, but just my feel of the card. Love the flavor too!
Mine is based off a League of Legends champion, so if anyone knows her/them that'd be awesome. Also if anyone knows how I could get enough room for the flavor on there, it'd like it to say:
"Peacefully, they go. Hungry, we follow!"
-Kindred, the Eternal Hunters
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/kindred-the-eternal-hunters-6
PS: How do you post the image of the card directly in the comments...?
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Awesome, thanks man!
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/fiendish-feline
It's a large risk to toss 6 mana into an all-or-nothing card like that, and while it is certainly appealing, it has no way to really guarantee it's success. I might suggest changing it to base 13 instead of 20, dropping the first strike and making it 3BB or so. 2BB if you're going for mythic rarity. If you wanted to keep the first strike, drop it to 9, make it's toughness 2 and keep it at 3BB.
The straight gamble cards have a very.... red feel, ya know?
Thoughts?
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/bpylgx-secret-savant
Also, infinite shuffling!
Is this Liliana seems okay or not?
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Concerning the card, I would probably reword the second ability to "Target player discards his or her hand, then loses life equal tot he number of cards discarded this way." And to make the card more fun, I would probably make each player discard a card and lose 1 life, not just you.
Technically, Bpylgx would not enable infinite shuffling because it is a "you may" ability. But because it would be difficult to get the emblem, and Courser of Kruphix effects are rare, I think it is fine.
Hmm...
You: Finally I can put the emblem of Bpylgx!
Opponent: Welp, apparently I still have this Courser of Kruphix.
You: Shuffle your library!
Opponent: I.... reveal the top card of my library...
You: *Desperate screams* SHUFFLE IT.... !!
Opponent: ....
Lol.
You could also change the second ability to a 0 cost if you left it as-is, since the ult is hard enough to reach anyways.
As far as Liliana goes, I'd agree with Gel that the first ability should be buffed a bit. Also I'd recommend dropping the starting counters from 5 to 4 and the cost of the second from -4 to -3 and changing it to "loses life equal to the number of non-land cards", because as it sits now the 2nd ability is almost as strong as the ult, if not more in some cases.
In case it's not clear it was made for the unfun contest.
As you've mentioned it's for the unfun contest. So I'll avoid criticisms in that regard, but I can provide some help with formatting and help fix some exploits.
For the first ability, I think it would be best to compare this to Cruel Reality. So I'd format it as follows...
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Whenever a player casts a spell, that player exiles two untapped lands they control. If they can't, that player loses half their life total rounded up, then exiles their hand.
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As for the last ability, I think this would be easier. It also provides a means of preventing someone from using it just to exile their library.
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Exile the top five cards of your library: You are unaffected by Mana Pains this turn. Any player may activate this ability once per turn and only during their turn.
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Overall these changes fix most of the formatting issues and typos, as well as some exploits. But I'd recommend trying to make it feel less polarizing.
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I'm trying to make a white tempo costed creature that helps fixing of basic-Plains cards for the mono-color devoted. But I seem to be stumped on how to make it strong combat-wise when compared to other white cards. Overall, white just seems to have too strong of creatures these days for the cards to compare to existing options.
I've made a few attempts, but I'm wondering either where I'm going wrong or what some ideas other cardsmiths may recommend.
Okay, thanks for the feedback. I'll make sure to push the effects more in the direction of giving rather than fixing due to that issue.
As for the ideas you posted, I like the second and third especially so I'll be pushing the triggered abilities further.
I'd prefer keeping it at 3 CMC and fabricate 1 due to the high tempo nature of Modern or Standard token decks. Typically Commander and two headed giant games allow for higher CMC token based cards.
If you feel that's less impressive, you could always make the crafter a 2/1. Especially as it's a rare and wouldn't be bad on drafts therefore.