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Chain of Feedback
Hello everyone!
This thread is for people who put a great effort into to their creation, and for people who want some constructive feedbacks on their cards.
So, the rule of this thread is, you post one of your cards that you want someone to see. BUT, if you do that, you must give feedbacks on at least two cards just above your comment.
For example : If you are person C, your comment is
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C
@A - "A's Card's name"
I think your card should cost at least 3. And the wording is incorrect. I commented on your card's page to show the correct wording.
@B - "B's Card's name"
Instant favorite. Really great card!
And this is my card. I especially want your opinion about the base power and toughness.
"C's Card's name"
(Link to your card)
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And the next person D must give feedbacks on @B and @C's cards to post his or her card.
Please use "@ to let them know that you left feedback (or favorite). You can just use Favorite" if the card is so perfect and nothing to be said. If you remake your card, it would be nice if you say thank you and give credit to people who gave you feedback on the new card's comment.
I'll start off with two comments below as examples. So please don't comment while I'm doing that.
This thread is for people who put a great effort into to their creation, and for people who want some constructive feedbacks on their cards.
So, the rule of this thread is, you post one of your cards that you want someone to see. BUT, if you do that, you must give feedbacks on at least two cards just above your comment.
For example : If you are person C, your comment is
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C
@A - "A's Card's name"
I think your card should cost at least 3. And the wording is incorrect. I commented on your card's page to show the correct wording.
@B - "B's Card's name"
Instant favorite. Really great card!
And this is my card. I especially want your opinion about the base power and toughness.
"C's Card's name"
(Link to your card)
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And the next person D must give feedbacks on @B and @C's cards to post his or her card.
Please use "@ to let them know that you left feedback (or favorite). You can just use Favorite" if the card is so perfect and nothing to be said. If you remake your card, it would be nice if you say thank you and give credit to people who gave you feedback on the new card's comment.
I'll start off with two comments below as examples. So please don't comment while I'm doing that.
This discussion has been closed.
Comments
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senbnzakura
@MrRandom - "MrRandom's Wrath"
That's terribly done. I think you should flip the coin 10 times, instead of twice for the 9th ability.
@CrucibleofLove - "Storm of Love"
Awesome. It has very powerful synergy with Storm Crow, which is know as the most ferocious hunter in the sky.
And this is my card I want your feedbacks.
"Angel"
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/angel-438?list=user
I agree with @senbonzakura. Your Storm of Love is amazing. But I'm afraid it being too good if you build Storm Crow deck around that card. I wrote my idea of how to fix the balance of that card on your card's page. Please check it out.
@senbonzakura - "Angel"
You are genius, as always! High synergy with Decree of Justice. 1 fav from me.
This is my card. Should this cost {1}{u}? Please tell me what you think.
"Seafloor Oracle"
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/seafloor-oracle-5?list=user
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...So this is how it works.
The next person gives feedbacks on
senbonzakura's - "Angel"
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/angel-438?list=user
And Tomigon's - "Seafloor Oracle"
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/seafloor-oracle-5?list=user
Then you can post your card.
The reason why I started is, many great cards are created every day, but some of them are missed and buried in ganders. So I came up with this idea. Hope this going well.
If you understand how things go, please start
@Tomigon - I love the concept of this card! I'm concerned about the second tap ability, because it's unclear if you just mix the three bottom cards up and put them back on the bottom or if you shuffle those three back into your whole library
Here is my Card to be looked at
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/malendrum-1
I'm not sure on the flavor text
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Corwinnn
@senbonzakura's - Angel
I Love the Token and I think it's awesome! Great Art!
@Tomigon's - Seafloor Oracle
I love the concept of this card! I'm concerned about the second tap ability, because it's unclear if you just mix the three bottom cards up and put them back on the bottom or if you shuffle those three back into your whole library
Here is my Card to be looked at :
Malendrum
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/malendrum-1
I'm not sure on the flavor text
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I LOVE that idea! I think that would be an amazing card in my commander deck!
@Corwinnn's - Malendrum
Not much I would change about it, but I might add 1 colorless to the CMC and monstrous because it is a 4/4 with doublestrike and flash for 5. . . yeah, a little op. and with the montrous, it is . . . WOAH! I like the flavor!
I need some help with this card, PLEASE!
Renewed Assult: http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/renewed-assult?list=user
Well, I took a look at Fleetfeather Cockatrice for help balancing this. Based on that alone, I would say that, since this is a rare and has doublestrike instead of deathtouch and flying, the CMC is fine. However, that monstrosity cost seems a bit low, and I would add another {1} to it. This will make it, essentially, a 7 cost 7/7 doublestrike, which would be a rare in it's own right. Also, why is it a mutant? When I just look at it, it seems like a monstrous merfolk shark, but "mutant" implies it didn't start out that way. This becomes confusing when coupled with the flavor text, which implies it is a member of an entire species.
@Commander_Paratus's - Renewed Assult
First thing's first, you spelled assault wrong. Also, I believe the combat phase should be referred to as "extra," because it is inserted where it doesn't belong, and is in fact extra. Moving on, six mana seems fine for this, but I would like it to cost less, since in an aggro deck, six mana is a LOT. Therefore, to decrease its power level a bit, I would say "You may cast Renewed Assault only during an opponent's precombat main phase." This would add another layer to the spell, as your opponent would have to decide what to attack with and what to block with. As is, you can cast it after your opponent attacks with everything and wipe the floor with their face. I love the idea of the card, though. FAV!
Numhatni, Willfully Malicious
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/numhatni-willfully-malicious-1
This card was designed for Tiny Leaders EDH, so keep that in mind. I tried to make it a little more powerful than the original version (dead and gone, so no comparison), but I'm not sure how it worked out. Really, what I'm worried about here is how I should change his P/T and whether only discarding one card for the first ability is fine.
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That's the end of that.
@MrRandom and @CrucibleOfLove? LOLZ.
@Tomigon The thing that caught my eye in your example is how thorough you praise of your alternate account was. Just thought I'd tell you.
I so love the concept. But I think the reminder text is telling the effect more clearly. I think it can be worded more simply like;
"Cast this card only during your opponent's combat phase. After your opponent's combat step, you may attack with creatures you control as though it were your turn, and that opponent may block as though it wasn't his or her turn."
@CrucibleOfHate - Numhatni, Willfully Malicious
4 cards draw seems a bit too much to me. And having a repeatable would be quite the thing. Especially in tiny leader, cards in your hand is used very quickly, and it's very easy to empty your hand. Maybe I would go 3. But to tell you the truth, I've never played tiny leader game. So I don't know how powerful "draw 4 cards" is.
And I think the toughness should be pumped more, because if you can kill this creature easily in combat, you can repeat the ability very quickly. So if this is my card, I would make its P/T like around 2/5. But this thought is also because I think "draw 4 cards" might be too powerful. I'm curious about the thought of the next person! Btw I'm glad that you enjoyed my examples
This is my card that I want some feedbacks.
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/brutal-bear?list=user
I'm not sure about this P/T. And I'm also thinking about adding another ability. I also want you to tell me the reminder text is worded correctly or not. And I feel like the flavor text should be a bit different.. If you come up with a better one, I'd like to use it in the new version if you allow me to do so.
3 different kinds of mana for a 4/3 sounds solid, but the option of repeating it over and over seems too much for me. In a Sultai aggro deck, (is there such a thing?) this card would be an instant staple and could possibly wreck standard. However, it enters the battlefield face down, which means that an opponent can kill it quickly to end the cycle. Then again, you could just cast another...
I give it 8 out of 10 stars, mostly because I want to see Sultai back into Standard.
@Tomigon's Brutal Bear:
A 5/6 flash? For 5 mana? Sweet! I think that Flash should be used more in Magic, so I really like the card. It also makes killing off your other creatures harder for your opponents because it makes this one creature bigger.
I give it 9 out of 10 stars.
My card:
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/marshling-toadcharmer?list=user
Also if that was a real card I'd have 4 of them in my Justice League deck. It's blue-green, lots of flash and flying. :P
@Gelectrode this is such a wierd card! I love it. I actually see the wisdom in shrouding one of your own creatures. I'm thinking it would do well with a green-black wall deck, lots of "creatures you control get +x/+x enchants. Sit pretty with your creatures that cant attack and then murder everything with a sudden swarm of toads. Nonsense ensues.
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The card I need feedback on most right now is my newest commanderish idea, Sigismund: http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/sigismund-the-sunsword?list=set&set=4329
He is a new idea I got, the Sac-able commander. I'm having difficulty finding balance with him, in terms of mana cost. The idea is that he is supposed to be able to be sacked repeatedly for benefits, the trade-off against stupidity being that you pay (2) more to summon him every time he dies (Standard commander rules.)
However i'm bellyaching over whether this will be prohibitively expensive. I've considered reducing the choices to 2 (lose the -X Life option) and instead adding a passive that makes him cost (1) less to cast for each time he's been sacrificed. He is basically meant to be an Ouroboros... what do you guys think?
This card is adorable! That's really the best thing I can say. I love it, and it's balanced correctly, but I can't imagine it being that useful. Sure it has flash, and its Black/Green, colors that don't normally have access to shroud, but if you needed to protect your creatures, you would probably have better options. Also, the name confused me for a little bit. I expected someone who charms toads. I realized that it was referring to casting charms the make things toads, but only after I reread the card not look for toad-hypnosis. Also, "sprite" is not an established creature type, so why not just Faerie or Kithkin or something along those lines?
@Xenadis's - Sigismund the Sunsword
That ability is worded pretty funkily. "Sacrifice Sigismund the Sunsword: Choose one: ..."
He seems fine as a four-cost 4/4. However, he doesn't feel like a mythic with that power level. Think about him outside of EDH. He's a 4 cost 4/4 that can, in exchange for his life, give you a chance to recast one of your weaker creatures, make an opponent lose 4 life, or make you gain 4 life? He doesn't even have a power level worthy of a legend. He is in desperate need of a power buff. Also, that lifegain seems particularly paltry, when he'd make a more effective blocker. Before you figure out how you want to make him better in EDH, make him a better card in general. Since I don't know what you're going for, I don't really have any suggestions for you. Sorry.
Leona, Voiceless
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/leona-voiceless?list=user
She's a planeswalker with two ultimates and a stalling ability. What more do you want?
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@Xenadis You're supposed to say the name of the card as well when you give the creator's name.
@Xedanis - Sigismund the Sunsword
Cool card! I am not too keen on the way that his abilities are purely black, with no blue or white in them... I do like however how his abilities are worded so you can't abuse him in commander! Well done!
@CrucibleOfHate - Leona, Voiceless
What an intriguing idea! I really just like the design of this card, and i salute you for doing such a good job! Only thing I would change is maybe have her second ability some how look at a card in his/her hand. Sorta like "0 Target player reveals a card from his/her hand. Leona deals X damage to target creature where X is the revealed card's converted mana cost." A bit wordy I know, but I think something like that would make your card just perfect! Keep it up!
Here's mine:
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/enkavma-rage-unbound?list=set&set=4452
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well, we just have to wait. Hahaha!
Thanks for bumping this up!
@CrucibleOfHate - Because you understand the system, if you could be the first one who comment on the new thread, it would be nice.
Please checkout the new thread.
http://forums.mtgcardsmith.com/discussion/936/chain-of-feedback#latest
This discussion is closed.