@MemoryHead
Interesting concept, some small wording errors... but other then that I like it.
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Art by me. This is a character from a book series, he has unbeatable luck.
@Fantastickill7 Do you mind if I ask what those wording errors are? It always helps to know where you've made mistakes and even critically rereading it, I can't find anything wrong.
@MemoryHead For the adventure, it should be "target permanent card" not "a permanent card" "one or more" is unnecessary because it's only the first 1 each turn. so I would make that just "Whenever a land card is put into your graveyard from anywhere for the first time each turn, put a +1/+1 counter on Highland Wanderer." there is nothing wrong with one or more, it's just more words, and is unnecessary. These are really really minor and I probably wouldn't notice them if I wasn't looking.
- The lack of target is necessary as targets are chosen as you cast a spell, while this is chosen as that part of the effect resolves (and so you can pick cards from among the things it mills as part of the effect). You can see this in action on numerous cards, recent examples including Acolyte of Affliction and Cauldron's Gift.
- The "one or more" is also necessary. If multiple land cards were put into your graveyard by a single mill effect, they would all trigger the ability if this was the first time lands were entering your graveyard that turn were it not for that clause due to the lands being put there simultaneously. You can see an example of this being needed on the card Crawling Sensation.
<a href="https://scryfall.com/search?q=o:"first+time+each"+o:cards">Crawling Sensation</a> demonstrates the second principle nicely too. As a semi-regular reminder, I try to post on card pages with feedback from time to time so I don't clutter up the forums and not follow up with a card to critique... like I'm doing now.
@Fantastickill7 Coin flipping is red. If you don't want to change that card's color, you can do-
"... reveal the top card of your library. If it's a ___ card, (effect.)"
@Temurzoa, Seems pretty reasonable to me. I initially thought that you should tap in addition to the sacrifice and mana cost for the second ability, as the sacrifice is a big enough cost for the ability. Also, since red blue is not a mill heavy deck, I don't worry that much about discard overload. Nice job
Rensh'k seems very simple for a planeswalker, but that's not a bad thing. I'm not sure why he/she/they need to have black, though, as nothing in its abilities really fits black.
Manick is also quite simple, but definitely something I could build a Commander deck around. Kithkin and warrior tribal would be cool.
This card literally exists solely because of the artwork I found.
@Level20GnollBard, always remember to credit the artist. I really like the concept of expanding the range of faeries to include other niche types. My only other suggestion would be to replace "gets" with "has."
@Temurzoa I try to credit the artist whenever possible. Sometimes I can't find the artist even when using reverse image search. This was probably one of those times. If someone does know the artist of that one in particular, I'll edit the card to reflect this.
And I wanted dullahans to be fey rather than undead, and outside of making dullahan a creature type, faerie was my best choice.
As for your card, I commented on your card, but I'll repeat it here. No base power and toughness? Even if it's meant to be 0/0 when not on fire, you should point that out as such.
Otherwise, really funny for an un-set card, even if it'd never be printed in real life for fire safety reasons.
@EnvyReaper, here's how Singol should be reworded:
"When Singol Turen, Grand Vizier enters the battlefield, you gain 2 life and reveal the top card of your library. If it's an artifact card, you may put it onto the battlefield. Otherwise, put it into your graveyard.
Artifact spells you cast cost 1 less to cast.
Whenever a nontoken noncreature artifact you control is put into a graveyard from the battlefield, exile Singol Turen, then return him to the battlefield transformed under his owner's control."
Personally, I think Singol has too much going on and should be simplified. Also, I kept on cleaning my Urza's Sunglasses before I realized the smudge is a watermark. Otherwise nice design.
@shadow123 Last Grasp seems fine as a card in terms of balance. My main note about it would be the name, which might be a little too close to the real card Last Gasp. I'd personally be inclined to use something more unique or that makes a little more sense, though I can understand what the logic is etc. My other point would be about the card's flavor (not just the flavor text, but the flavor as a whole). It seems torn between the flavor of being a kill spell and (insofar as I can tell from the flavor text) being some sort of memorial card. I don't know exactly how to describe this, but I feel like the flavor of the card between the mechanic, effect and flavor text is all over the place.
Devoted Healer is also acceptable in concept (though extremely good in limited for just staying on the defensive), but suffers for that inexplicable first ability. It's something that MTG has never done, it's confusing (giving rise to such questions as "Is it like it's got vigilance or can it just not attack unless it has vigilance because that would involve tapping?") and the only obvious reason I can think of for it being there (so that multiple copies can't protect one another) doesn't even seem particularly dangerous. Perhaps there's another reason for it that I can't see, so it'd be interesting to hear the logic behind it. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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That card just gets the wheels going for the Johnny in me. This is a card I'd love to have in any sort of graveyard recursion deck, particularly one with sacrifice outlets.
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Interesting concept, some small wording errors... but other then that I like it.
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Art by me. This is a character from a book series, he has unbeatable luck.
For the adventure, it should be "target permanent card" not "a permanent card"
"one or more" is unnecessary because it's only the first 1 each turn. so I would make that just "Whenever a land card is put into your graveyard from anywhere for the first time each turn, put a +1/+1 counter on Highland Wanderer." there is nothing wrong with one or more, it's just more words, and is unnecessary.
These are really really minor and I probably wouldn't notice them if I wasn't looking.
- The lack of target is necessary as targets are chosen as you cast a spell, while this is chosen as that part of the effect resolves (and so you can pick cards from among the things it mills as part of the effect). You can see this in action on numerous cards, recent examples including Acolyte of Affliction and Cauldron's Gift.
- The "one or more" is also necessary. If multiple land cards were put into your graveyard by a single mill effect, they would all trigger the ability if this was the first time lands were entering your graveyard that turn were it not for that clause due to the lands being put there simultaneously. You can see an example of this being needed on the card Crawling Sensation.
Well then I guess I was wrong
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I'm not saying that's bad, I'm saying that sounds like way too much fun lol.
Coin flipping is red. If you don't want to change that card's color, you can do-
"... reveal the top card of your library. If it's a ___ card, (effect.)"
Very nice art!
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http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/heretics-talisman
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/ibramull-madcap-scholar
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/kobe-heavens-best
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What is everybody's thoughts on this?
*https://gatherer.wizards.com/Pages/Card/Details.aspx?multiverseid=446137
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Manick is also quite simple, but definitely something I could build a Commander deck around. Kithkin and warrior tribal would be cool.
This card literally exists solely because of the artwork I found.
https://gatherer.wizards.com/Pages/Card/Details.aspx?multiverseid=456527
This card, then.
And I wanted dullahans to be fey rather than undead, and outside of making dullahan a creature type, faerie was my best choice.
As for your card, I commented on your card, but I'll repeat it here. No base power and toughness? Even if it's meant to be 0/0 when not on fire, you should point that out as such.
Otherwise, really funny for an un-set card, even if it'd never be printed in real life for fire safety reasons.
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/lycanthropy-4
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Capitalize the 'when', also, why Flash?
First side for an artifact friendly Creature-Planeswalker Commander, how did I go?
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/ironscale-looter
(Quick edit to clarify his ability)
I like it a lot! I’m leaving a fave on it.
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Devoted Healer is also acceptable in concept (though extremely good in limited for just staying on the defensive), but suffers for that inexplicable first ability. It's something that MTG has never done, it's confusing (giving rise to such questions as "Is it like it's got vigilance or can it just not attack unless it has vigilance because that would involve tapping?") and the only obvious reason I can think of for it being there (so that multiple copies can't protect one another) doesn't even seem particularly dangerous. Perhaps there's another reason for it that I can't see, so it'd be interesting to hear the logic behind it.
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https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/energy-link