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I like the idea of your cards. But some things need a lot of work. Let's work on this card:
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/ardos-hell-executioner?list=user
First tip: Don't be afraid to capitalize. I do it all the time (Mainly with school essays). So, instead of "Ardos hell executioner", do "Ardos, Hell's Executioner"
Now, you have the right idea for Legendary Creature, but the subtype seems slightly off to me. So, you have his race (Giant), but nothing else. Plus, I think a demon would be in charge of executing. So, I think the subtype should be changed to Demon Warrior.
For the mechanics, I would say to scrap Deathtouch and Flash, unless you were going for a Grixis card (Blue, Black, and Red). Also, crank the Double strike down to First strike.
So, now let's work on the activated abilities. Here is the original:
{x}{t}: destroy X plains permanents.
{t} target opponent exiles all instants in their library.
{t}{r} target opponent exiles all sorcery in their library.
As I said, capitalization matters. Some of these abilities are crazy OP. So, after tampering with them for a bit, this is what I got:
{x}{x},{t}: Target opponent sacrifices X plains permanents.
{t}, Pay 1 life: Search target opponent's library for up to three instant or sorcery spells. Exile them.
So, this was just a few suggestions on what to do. If you have any questions, just tag me on this discussion (Tag me with @GodFerretGaming) and I should be right over.
For example, your card "Temple of eternal solitude" has a lot of wording and formatting mistakes.
It is:
as Temple of eternal solitude enters the battlefield, scry 5. if mana would be produced, triple your mana even if tapped. {t} add {b}{b}{b}{b} to your mana pool. {t}{b}{x} put X X/X black demon creature tokens onto the battlefield with flying and deathtouch.It should be:
When Temple of Eternal Solitude enters the battlefield, scry 5. Whenever enchanted land is tapped for mana, its controller adds two mana of the color it produced to his or her mana pool. {t}: Add {b}{b}{b} to your mana pool. {x}{b}, {t}: Put X X/X black Demon creature tokens with flying and deathtouch onto the battlefield under your control.That being said, this card is... Not... Good... I'm just going to list a few reasons off the top of my head:
1) You didn't capitalize the other adjectives/nouns/verbs in the name
2) It can't be cast (it has no casting cost)
3) It is a Legendary Enchant Land with a subtype of 'land'. This doesn't mean anything. It is not a land.
4) There isn't much scry in black unless you're doing something else and paying life or saccing for it, like in Read the Bones or Viscera Seer.
5) Scry 5 is insane. The only card in the entirety of MTG that lets you scry 5 is Nissa's Revelation and it costs 7cmc.
6) Nothing triples mana production, not even in green. Black certainly doesn't do it and if it did it would probably cost you a literal arm and a leg.
7) You don't tap enchantments to trigger their abilities.
8) Nothing should be able to produce {b}{b}{b}{b} each turn by tapping. That is too much mana.
9) Things that attach to other things (equipment, enchantments, etc) don't tap to do things. The thing they are attached to do.
10) The last ability... Just... sigh It is so overpowered that when I read it the first time it caused me physical pain in my chest.
11) Any individual ability this has should have a cost ranging from 8cmc in black to infinite. All of them combined is so far beyond overpowered even Foegod would look at it and be, like, "Woah, hold on there buddy."
TL;DR: Every single thing in this card is wrong. There are no suggestions I can make because I can't even tell what you intended this to be in the context of a real game of Magic. The only way any of this would make sense is if this card was made for a different yet eerily similar game and I somehow missed that.
Should I take a look at some more of your cards?
Valley of the Hidden
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/valley-of-the-hidden?list=user
a) hidden needs to be capitalized
b) there needs to be a colon after the tap ability
c) the a needs to be capitalized in "Add b/r to your mana pool
d) the second is ability is too over-powered. 6 mana for free is insane. An OP card in MTG costs 1 mana and adds only 3 mana to your mana pool
e) again, the first ability is too over-powered. Usually it would be add black OR red to your mana pool, not both. Since it doesn't enter tapped an does nothing bad to you, that ability is too OP
f) there needs to be space between each ability
g) space after the word "add"
h) the letter s needs to capitalized in the word "Sacrifice"
i) there should be a comma before the sacrifice ability
j) after the sacrifice ability there should be a colon instead of a comma
I think you need to do more research before making your cards.
http://mtgcardsmith.com/view/killer-croc-12?list=user
a) the mana cost is backwards
b) the beginning of each sentence needs to be capitalized
c) all planeswalkers have a name (e.g., Jace, Liliana, Ajani), and the subtype needs to be that name. The card's name needs to include that subtype name (e.g., Ajani Steadfast, Ajani, Mentor of Heroes)
d) the second ability shouldn't be a +3
Again, more research and effort needs to be put into your cards
a) you said you wanted feedback
b) his suggestions really can't be wrong, they are used in real MTG cards by WoTC
This is also a custom Magic: The Gathering card forum. If you're here, you're 100% nerdy.
http://forums.mtgcardsmith.com/categories/tutorials
@LukeMTG, if someone suggests me for help on cards, I'm scared. XD