Hello everybody, I need some help with a wording predicament. Hopefully someone might be able to figure this out!
I'm looking to change the following on this card, while making the player not need to shuffle if it wasn't used.
"When Herald of Endless Planes enters the battlefield or blocks a creature attacking another player," to "When Herald of Endless Planes enters the battlefield or blocks a creature attacking an opponent,"
The difficulty is doing this while keeping the other abilities on the card space-wise.
@Beydin13 How would you write it solidating for an opponent specifically? Just making sure.
As of the moment, I've been working on revising two new terms. (Not the final versions!)
Scour for a [Specific] card. (You may search your library for a [Specific] card, reveal it, and put it into your hand. If you do, shuffle your library.)
Forage for a [Specific] card. (You may search your library for a [Specific] card and reveal it. If you do, shuffle your library, then put that card on top of it.)
@modnation675 First strike, vigilance; solidarity (You may have another player gain control of this creature until end of turn during combat phase as blocker, if both players agree on who declares blocking.)
When Herald of Endless Plains enters the battlefield or is controlled by another defending player you may search your library for a basic Plains card, reveal it, then shuffle your library and put that card on top.
@Beydin13 I can't change the solidarity ability as that would mean I'd have to deal with a ton of more issues. Which is why this is extremely difficult and likely hasn't a satisfying solution.
@Tigersol I did at one point but someone pointed out that it's more realistic to give them bird for a subtype and have them named Raven. I also checked on other cards that do a similar thing so I could get the wording right. Anyway, thanks for the feedback!
And, I'll respond to the post above mine so they get some feedback. If everyone did that, no one would get left out and we'd all gain a little more perspective about our designs. There is no rule that we must do that. But it seems like a decent thing to do.
@schaefb20, nwoD edispU ehT is a neat card. I like what you've done with the name, very Unhinged sort of feel to it. However, the card is trying to do too much. I suggest you keep the first ability, remove the second, keep the third, and remove the fourth. The card will still be potent, but it will also be more aesthetically pleasing and the power will be a bit more restrained.
@MrRansom Seems like a good political card that's either a burn spell or a removal/slaughter games. I think it is definitely a playable card but 4 mana might make it hesitant to be played. Maybe like a one-of in control variants.
@Decaldor A new name could be Spark Reignited. I don't know about flavor text though. Something showing how his journey has come to an end and someone else will fill in for him.
What do you guys think about this. It would be good in Death's shadow but I think Temur Battle Rage is just better in that deck. What do you think about the flavor?
Okay @Gelectrode that sounds like a good catch. Also, I really like that card. It has flavor, and seems like a great sideboard card. It kills bogles, eldrazi titans (depending on the format), along with other things. The colors are great as well.
I like the idea of the card, but I think casting something from your graveyard is too powerful because you can do it over and over again. What about reducing the mana cost by 1 and remove the graveyard clause?
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Aw... Thanks, welcome to the comunity
I'm looking to change the following on this card, while making the player not need to shuffle if it wasn't used.
"When Herald of Endless Planes enters the battlefield or blocks a creature attacking another player,"
to
"When Herald of Endless Planes enters the battlefield or blocks a creature attacking an opponent,"
The difficulty is doing this while keeping the other abilities on the card space-wise.
Note: If you know how to fix the issue mentioned prior though, I'd be so grateful for you leaving a comment!
Maybe have it say "When Herald of Endless Plains enters the battlefield or solidates..."
My wording could be confusing.
How would you write it solidating for an opponent specifically? Just making sure.
As of the moment, I've been working on revising two new terms. (Not the final versions!)
Scour for a [Specific] card. (You may search your library for a [Specific] card, reveal it, and put it into your hand. If you do, shuffle your library.)
Forage for a [Specific] card. (You may search your library for a [Specific] card and reveal it. If you do, shuffle your library, then put that card on top of it.)
First strike, vigilance; solidarity (You may have another player gain control of this creature until end of turn during combat phase as blocker, if both players agree on who declares blocking.)
When Herald of Endless Plains enters the battlefield or is controlled by another defending player you may search your library for a basic Plains card, reveal it, then shuffle your library and put that card on top.
I can't change the solidarity ability as that would mean I'd have to deal with a ton of more issues. Which is why this is extremely difficult and likely hasn't a satisfying solution.
Understood. And the best of luck to you. It was pretty tough.
Regardless, thank you so much for the help!
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/leone-yagtars-strategist
Anxious Dead may need a P/T bump or additional keywords. Menace?
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I curious whether or not you think the mana cost is too low for this card:
@schaefb20, nwoD edispU ehT is a neat card. I like what you've done with the name, very Unhinged sort of feel to it. However, the card is trying to do too much. I suggest you keep the first ability, remove the second, keep the third, and remove the fourth. The card will still be potent, but it will also be more aesthetically pleasing and the power will be a bit more restrained.
I would like opinions on the following:
1. A semi-removal spell: https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/hang-on-1
2. A twist on the name Flusterstorm and the effect of Faithless Looting: https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/flutterstorm
I love the concept behind Hang On.
It seems a mix between and end game savior and an early game killer.
What do you guys think about this. It would be good in Death's shadow but I think Temur Battle Rage is just better in that deck. What do you think about the flavor?
I think the ability that prevents damage is a trifle odd for someone in 'plain sight' What about 'Damage cannot be prevented this turn'?
Thoughts?
https://mtgcardsmith.com/view/succumb-to-mortality
EDIT: Removed being able to cast cards from the graveyard, as suggested be @Gelectrode. Now has a power of 1.
I like the idea of the card, but I think casting something from your graveyard is too powerful because you can do it over and over again. What about reducing the mana cost by 1 and remove the graveyard clause?
Thoughts about this card?
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All of these were made in one day.
Cards don't untap during upkeep anyways lol